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  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Abarith: Seekers of the Arcane Throne (Prologue)

    Hmm.. the name Cladius I guess I could change to the more romantic Claudius. It was a rough name to describe a rough character. Though the general plays a larger ...

    Feb 19, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Abarith: Seekers of the Arcane Throne (Prologue)

    Prologues are allowed to be info dumps, since they are supposed to get a reader involved in the story, but I'll eliminate the beginning 'cliche' aspect. I'll just do info-dump ...

    Feb 17, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Magic of Chocolate: (chapter 3) Space Call

    Well, why would he self censor his thoughts? This bit got me and didn't make sense, perhaps it was a mistake: "He heard the sirens behind him, but still didn’t ...

    Feb 5, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Why I Hate Liking You

    A basic and slightly familiar poem. Now, as for specific form, I don't see the meter itself. Say... a 6 6 7 6 structure. While sound in meaning, it just ...

    Feb 3, 2008


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